Original Fiction Ōkami to Haīroguma (Alpha Test)

Chapter 1a The Wolf
A/N: This is essentially a series that I’d like to turn into a manga inspired series (If I can find somone whom may be interested in drawing such a thing) I’m essentially just considering this a beta or even an alpha considering it’s just the writing part and it’s frankly fresh off the presses. Hate to Beg, but if I could get some feedback as to how this is, please, please, please let me know what you think and what needs to be improved. This is actually one of three stories, I’m posting them each one at a time since I didn’t have enough time to write them all ahead of time.

Katie Whitton hastily clocked out and hurried out of the door. The past week had made the young woman feel as if she had been put through a hard edged grindstone. It wasn’t that she didn’t like her job, far from it in fact, but even the best of workers need a breather. She looked out the glassed doorframe watching as the thick raindrops fell to the ground. She let out a sigh.

“Of all times, why now did I forget an umbrella?”

The young woman put her sleeve over her head in a desperate attempt to block the rain from spewing into her face. she looked around to see if there was a shortcut or at least a way to get out of the direct path of the pour. She didn’t want to catch pneumonia after all.

without so much as thinking twice she darted across into the alleyway. Under normal circumstances she would have berated herself for crossing into an Alleyway this late at night. The cracks of Union City were known of being hiding places of all kinds of scum and villainy, whether it be pickpockets, brutes, or worse. By the time Ms. Katie began to think of any of this however, it was already too late to turn back, for a wolf whistle.

“Well, well, well” a course raspy voice echoed across the damp dark area. “What’s a pretty little thing like you doing out here in the streets this late at night?”

Katie tried to give some kind of rebuttal or response but all that came out was a “I-I-I….”

It’s often said that when a man’s instincts harbor a sense of danger, his body often falls into an automatic response known as fight or flight, but there is often a third response that is rarely talked about simply known as freeze, a reaction that very much speaks for itself, and a reaction Ms. Whitton would learn firsthand.

Whitton snapped into the other direction ready to go into a full-fledged spent, but couldn’t make more than a single step before the fiend grabbed her by the arm. Katie attempted to scream but she was cut off as the man squeezed her cheeks.

Shhhhh-shhh-shhh

“Now, now, now, none of that, I just want to play a little game.” With a flick of his wrist, the man summoned a switchblade. a demented smile stretched across his face, and it was all Katie needed to see to know that he was going to get some kind of sick thrill to out of whatever he was about to do.

The young woman squealed like a struck pig as the sharp blade glided across her cheek and then across her abdomen. The crimson liquid dripped across her cheek like a rancid paint. biting on the man’s leather glove she stomped on his boot with her stiletto (So there was a practical reason for wearing such things. ) as the thug cursed and swore, Katie bolted into whatever direction she could, only for it to turn into a dead in.

The thug quickly followed and grabbed her by the throat.

“you know what scream all you like, but no one is going to keep Johnny Steele from his prize.”

. “I wouldn’t be so cocky unless I knew I was out of earshot.”

Johnny looked up to see the silhouette of a man carrying an umbrella. Though he couldn’t really make out any details,

“I don’t know who you are,” Johnny growled. “But buzz off. This is none of your business.”

Though Johnny couldn’t see it the man smirked. “Considering that I paid for the lion’s share of these streets, I’m going to say that this IS my business.”

Johnny gritted his teeth as the mysterious man drew closer. Based on the shadowed features the man appeared to be of Japanese descent, though his face was more akin to that of a rugged wolf. Johnny gritted his teeth quickly switching his blade with a gun.

“Get any closer and I’ll fill you so full of lead your own grandfather won’t recognize you.”

The man did not change course continuing to move forward.

“I mean it! Don’t move. I’ll blow your head off!”

The man continued to move forward until he was nose to nose with Johnny. Despite staring point blank at the barrel of a pistol. The man’s face read that of one of no fear. Johnny couldn’t help but grit his teeth. The man realized he was dead with the pull of a trigger right? The man did not seem concerned.

“Go ahead, I’d like to see you try.”

*BANG*

Katie let out a scream as the sound of gunpowder echoed throughout the alley. However when the smoke cleared Johnny’s eyes widened as he realized the man was gone.

“What? There’s no way. I couldn’t have missed, not at point blank range. The man turned to his left and to his right. No sign of the man could be seen.

“What the….”

Johnny felt his body fling forward as he felt the force of a punch land to the back of his skull as he fell however, he found himself gripping to the man’s suit ripping a peace of it off. Johnny looked over at the man. Oddly enough he didn’t seem angry, rather he had a smirk on his face.

“Seriously, I just got this suit imported from japan.”

Johnny let out a snarl. “I’ll rip more than just your suit!”

The man let out shots until the clip emptied, but not a single bullet hit. The man seemed to move faster than Johnny’s eyes could catch.

“What are you? Are you some kind of teleporter?”

“I’m not a teleporter.” The man’s voice echoed as he delivered an uppercut to Johnny’s jaw. (フライングティンバーウルフパンチ Flying Timber Punch)“I just move very fast.”

Johnny flew backward landing on his back. Blood fell from his mouth and nose as he hazily glazed at the man who now seemingly towered over him.

“Who…are…you?” Johnny asked.

The man looked down at him and smirked. “My name is Abel Ōkami,…” He leaned in closer. “….but you will one day know me as the greatest fighter on the world. Johnny’s eyes rolled to the back of his head. Before proceeding to faint.

Abel turned back and pulled out a cellphone. “Asuka, I need you to pick up some trash. Give Chief Razor my regards. No I’m fine. Nah just a two bit thug. Ha-ha, Asuka I told you I’m fine….hey when you’re done, sparing match, and winner buys dinner? See you then.”

Abel turned around to see Katie desperately trying to cover her wound.

“Are you alright?” Abel asked. The woman weakly nodded as she tried to stagger forward, though the amount of blood she lost had zapped her of most of her strength. Though Abel caught her before she hit the ground.

“Easy, easy. Let’s get you to a hospital.”

Abel grabbed her and gently carried her to his car. the woman tried desperately to say thank you though with her weakness it sounded something more akin to “thnk ooo…”

“Save your strength.” Abel said quietly. “You’re losing a lot of blood.”

Abel carried the young woman to the front desk much to the receptionist surprise though in truth, she was far more surprised by who was carrying her more so than the woman herself.

“Mr. Ōkami?!?”

“This woman has been cut, she’s losing a lot of blood.” The receptionist nodded and proceeded to call for aid. “Rapid response, emergency room receptionist area, Trauma team stat. Rapid response, emergency room receptionist area, Trauma team stat, Rapid response, emergency room receptionist area, Trauma team stat.”

Abel preceded to hand the woman a handful of bills. “This should cover everything. Whatever aid she needs send it to my account. Speak of this to no one. This is just between me her and the hospital. “

The receptionist nodded though she was fairly confused as to why he would make such a request, but before she could ask for a explanation why as a means to satisfy her curiosity, able had already walked off.

Abel looked up at the sky and gazed at the glow of the full moon. A smile moved across his face.

hopefully this is meant that one more thug would be off the streets. Though he would not dwell on such things for two long. After all, he had a sparring match he had to attend.
 

CarlManvers2019

Writers Blocked Douchebag
Any chance this was in part inspired by Kengan Asura?



Admittedly, there's no epic fight here, just a common thug going up against a(superhuman)martial artist
 
Any chance this was in part inspired by Kengan Asura?



Admittedly, there's no epic fight here, just a common thug going up against a(superhuman)martial artist



actually this is closer to what I envisioned in my head when writing this. So guess I'll have to do some rewrites. again though this is why it's in alpha. Oddly enough, I've never seen this before.
 
Chapter 1b The 600 lbs Grizzly Bear
Yuffie took a deep breath as she looked at her opponent readying her position . Her opponent was a certain Botokhui Targhun, a Mongolian rikishi that was making quite a name for her in the amateur circuit. The young woman couldn’t help but smirk. Name or not, Champion or not, Yuffie was going to go down. This was a two out of three. When the referee gave the signal, the two amazon warriors charged at each other.

Yuffie took no time in grabbing her opponent by the belt and lifting her opponent out of the ring. All and all the round may have lasted about 15 to 20 seconds. the two wrestlers got into position again once again slamming each other when the referee once again gave the signal. Yuffie took no time in doing a throw and causing Botokhui to tumble out of the ring. The crowd let out a cheer as Yuffie helped Botokhui get back on her feet. The two bowed to each other, and then to the crowd. This would now be her 527th win.

As she exited headed to the lobby, one of her coworkers, a fellow Rikishi Named Yuka greeted her with a a bow.

“You did well out there.” Yuka remarked. “I appreciate it Yuka, Admittedly I’m not really happy with my performance. It feels like I was phoning it in.”

“Too easy?” Yuka asked.

Yuffie couldn’t help but nod as she grabbed her coat.

“Maybe you need to start competing with men. You’re definitely strong enough to compete against them. not to mention you outclass all the women here by a mile. I think the your twice the size of the 2nd largest wrestler competing here.”

“Yuffie simply shrugged. “ Yeah, everyone calls me a 600 lbs Grizzly Bear for a reason as far as competing with men, find me some mixed wrestling tournaments and I might. Besides, it’s not like there aren’t other martial arts tournaments I can be a part of. I enjoy Sumo for the tradition of it.”

Yuka nodded. “I understand. Still it’s a shame that Master Abel wasin’t Abel to make it.”

“Yeah, I wonder why he didn’t show up. He always comes toy you matches.

Bzzzzt Bzzzt

Yuffie held up her hand. “Looks like we are about to find out

“Yuffie here. “Hey Abel, what’s up? What…wait, are you hurt?!? Was it a super? Are you sure that you’re not hurt? Ok, go ahead and give me the location. Sure I’m always up for a spar. I think you mean loser buys dinner. See you then.”

“What is it?” Yuka asked

“Apparently Abel took down a thug, guess it was some kind of mugger. He needs us to Get the guy and take him to the police.”

The two guards walked into the city streets taking in the sites of the city. Despite the fact that Yuffie had lived in the city for years, She never stopped being in awe of the hustle and bustle of the market district. It felt so alive. Every corner seemed to burst with activity, whether it be businesses participating in commerce or people on the streets just chatting and talking about their day.

“You do know that Master Abel is going to try and pay for the date regardless of whether you win or not?” Yuka couldn’t help but giggle slightly.

“Yeah, I know, but you know that I’d never turn down a sparring match against him.”

“I don’t think he would either.”

“Haha, I don’t doubt it. He probably gets an adrenaline fighting me.”

“Something tells me that’s not the only rush he gives.”

Yuffie gave Yuka a slightly dirty look.

“That’s a rather bold statement.”

Yuka blushed a bit. “Sorry, that wasn’t my place.”

“Don’t worry about….” Yuffie’s thoughts were interrupted when she could hear a woman scream in panic. When she turned around to see where the chaos was coming from she saw a car seemingly barrel down the street. It took her no time at all to jump in front of the vehicle. She let out a grunt as she gripped the corners of its front. Her feet stood firm as the driver seemingly tried to break free. Was the driver crazy. Yuffie however refused to yield one way or another this guy was going to stop. Letting out a grunt of defiance, she began to push and lift until the back of the car was visible off the ground by a couple of inches. The car continued to screech as the wheels still spun until they finally stopped. Yuffie relented and sat the car back down. The Driver door swung open only for said driver to topple over. The man got up and attempted to provoke her, based on his stout smell and incoherent slurred speech, it was clear the man was loaded. Yuffie paid him no mind and simply shoved him aside. Yuka quickly apprehended him and contacted the police.

Yuffie looked over to see a woman and her young daughter. Both gave her a look of both terror and wonder.

“Are you two alright?” Yuffie asked. The mother rushed to her and embraced her. Sobbing. though from what Yuffie could tell, the mother was desperately trying to say thank you.

“It’s nothing I’m just doing my job. Do you need me to call you a cab?”

The woman shook her head.

“Alright just stay safe. Come Yuka.”

If one were to ask Yuffie if this kind of thing was normal, and as much as she could say no, that would have been lying. Trouble often had a way of finding Yuffie and Abel whether they were looking for it or not, and frankly they didn’t mind it. After all, a little excitement made life all that more interesting.
 

CarlManvers2019

Writers Blocked Douchebag
Mongolian Rikishi? The moment I saw the word "Mongolian" I thought you had caught up to Kengan Omega


No offence, but so far, your protagonists are just dealing with thugs and while they're pretty superhuman. It shines much more when they're fighting multiple at the very least and thus more danger feels like it's there.

That said, any image references for these characters?

Because when you said 600 lbs

5df8ef7df5b0ee76336c6122


Let's just say I feel lucky that I'm not yet that fat
 
Mongolian Rikishi? The moment I saw the word "Mongolian" I thought you had caught up to Kengan Omega


No offence, but so far, your protagonists are just dealing with thugs and while they're pretty superhuman. It shines much more when they're fighting multiple at the very least and thus more danger feels like it's there.

That said, any image references for these characters?

Because when you said 600 lbs



Let's just say I feel lucky that I'm not yet that fat

Gah, dude put that thing away, there are children here!

no she's a bit more muscular than that and she's actually inspired by two very popular rinkshi



these two could have made it to the top, but sadly they were plagued by controversy.
 

Bear Ribs

Well-known member
Yuffie took a deep breath as she looked at her opponent readying her position . Her opponent was a certain Botokhui Targhun, a Mongolian rikishi that was making quite a name for her in the amateur circuit. The young woman couldn’t help but smirk. Name or not, Champion or not, Yuffie was going to go down.
This wording is very odd. It's from Yuffie's perspective but the boldfaced part is saying she'll go down. It looks very much like she's planning to take a dive and intentionally lose the fight which I don't think is your intention.
 

CarlManvers2019

Writers Blocked Douchebag
Chapter 1c: The Commissioner and his partner
Commissioner Razor looked at his computer as he stroke his admittedly hairless chin. His mind often drifted between the stress of his job with questions about what his next step would be. When he First became commissioner of union city, one of the first intentions he made clear was that he had intended to take a bite out of crime, and given the fact that he had dealt with 7 different attempts on his life within the two years he had taken the job, it meant he had to be rocking the boats of the right people at some point.

Course every great commissioner needs a support system, a partner, and none had his back like Brea Conner, she was the Watson to his Sherlock. The yin to his yang, the one who guarded his blindsides. That wasn’t to say they got along perfectly though. While Razor was known as a man living on the edge and bending the rules, Brea was a woman that was very much by the book . Still it didn’t stop either of them from getting along, or taking jabs at each other.

“Long night Ocham?”

The young commissioner couldn’t help but grin. “We’re UCPD Brea. It’s always a long night.”

Brea gave a smile as she handed him a cup of coffee. “coffee, rum extract, brown sugar, heavy whipping cream, and cocoa powder, AKA: one virgin Irish coffee.

Ocham gave the cheekiest grin he could “Oh man, Merry me Brea. I love you!”

“Yeah yeah,” Brea said, grinning as she walked away.

“I love you!” Ocham repeated even louder. “Pour some sugar on me.”

Brea proceeded to hold up her left hand. “You want sugar, put a ring on the bag. “

Ocham chuckled. The two had joined the police academy together and had this banter going on back and forth since the word go, and frankly he wouldn’t change a thing. To be frank the only reason why he hadn’t proposed yet was because he was frankly married to his mission as much as anything.

*KNOCK KNOCK KNOCK!!!*

Brea jumped out of seat to answer the door. Frantically opening it up. “Officer Brea Conner reporting for du….”

Her face curled up into a scowl as she gazed at the massive and imposing figure. The Rikishi body guard stood a good 6 in over Brea, and was over 4 times her size, Size and stature were not enough to intimidate the detective.

“What are you doing here Haīroguma?”

Brea raised an eyebrow as Yuffie stepped aside. Tied by bindings, a blacked eyed Johnny Steele curse ranted and raved as another one of Abel’s Rikishi Brea had recognized as Yuka, pushed him into the station. “Stop pushing me you fat broad! Do you know who am…

“Well, well, well, if it ain’t Johnny Steals-a-lot .” Ocham said as he popped in. “how I longed for you to never see your face again. Oh well I guess some things are impossible even for the gods. How are you doing yuffie?

Yuffie nodded and handed him a camera phone. “Abel Ōkami sends his regards.”

Ocham smiled Glory to him...and his house. the two proceeded to chuckle but Ocham cut his laughter short when Brea shot him a dirty look. “Alright let’s see what we have here.”

Ocham looked at the recorded footage all of it showed the assault from Abel’s point of view. Johnny sneered as he realized what he was seeing. “You mean to tell me that booshi had a hidden camera sewn into his suit?”

“Uh huh, and looks like you just graduated from mugging to masochistic assault pal.” The commissioner handed Yuffie back the camera. “How is she?”

“according to Abel they had to do an emergency blood transfusion but she’s stable. she won’t be in any condition to talk until the morning.”

“Understood.” Ocham said. He then turned to Brea. “First thing in the morning I need you and Felix to interview her. Try to get as many details as possible.”

“Will do.”

the commissioner turned back to Yuffie. “I’ll make sure to keep the guy here.”

Yuffie bowed. “Thank you. Now if you don’t mind I must take my leave.”

Yuka shoved Johnny into Brea’s arms. Brea then turned around and shoved him into a cell.

“Good luck trying to keep me here detective. I’ve got friends too!”

“Oh shut up!” she shouted. the thug quickly did so.

The detective sat down and proceeded to cross her arms. Ocham grinned a little bit. “I know that look. Don’t worry it’s not going to be hard to proof to the courts that Ōkami was acting as a good Good Samaritan.”

“I still don’t trust him. He wanders the streets like he’s some kind of Batman wannabee, he’s got his own bodyguard brigade of….I guess you can only describe as sumo girls who help with his little wars. How do we know if he’s any better than the Yakuza?

“Well I mean I’m not seeing any severed didgits from any of his employees, so that’s something.”

Brea held back a snicker. “Alright you got me there, but I still don’t trust him. If he wants to fight crime why can’t he put on a badge like the rest of us?”

Ocham chuckled. “Look Abel isn’t by the book, but trust me he hates organized crime probably more than the both of us combined.”

“Maybe….”

“you may not feel like you can trust him, but trust me. He’s own our side.”

Brea nodded. “I hope you’re right, but if he goes rouge, I won’t hesitate to bring him down.”

“Believe it or not, he’d greatly appreciate that. Hey once I get someone to relive us, do you want to go out and get some grub. I could use some good ol boneless wings.”

Brea smiled. “Sure I’d like that a lot.

No one ever said that being the commissioner of union city was going to be easy, and frankly Ocham didn’t care. When he became commissioner, he made a promise, a promise he intended to keep.
 

Bear Ribs

Well-known member
Ocham gave the cheekiest grin he could “Oh man, Merry me Brea. I love you!”
Should be "marry me" assuming he's (facetiously) proposing marriage there.

The guy being Commander Razor seems slightly off compared to the other names in the story. It would fit if there were more similarly sobriquet-style names but it's the only one and stands out a lot.

So Yuffie's not the only sumo-wrestler girl with Abel? It sounds like he's got a stable of them.
 
Should be "marry me" assuming he's (facetiously) proposing marriage there.

The guy being Commander Razor seems slightly off compared to the other names in the story. It would fit if there were more similarly sobriquet-style names but it's the only one and stands out a lot.

So Yuffie's not the only sumo-wrestler girl with Abel? It sounds like he's got a stable of them.

thanks.

yeah that's a name I'm going to have to change in the next draft.

Yeah he does. They essentially serve as his bodyguards and also aid as enforcers if need be. their primarily for show though.
 

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