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Battletech Make-up the Difference [Battletech crossover]
This chapter was... duller? It moved slower, and it dwelled on the description of the wedding so much that I skimmed a few paragraphs. I dunno what was wrong, really, I just can't put my finger on it. What does work, however, is the characters' personalities. I never watched Sailor Moon, but I...- Word Count: 110
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Battletech Make-up the Difference [Battletech crossover]
Commenting on Chapter 7A, because you updated before I could comment: I have no idea what you're doing either, but I'm enjoying it. Agreed. The little details in this story about contraband lingerie and tea etiquette are greatly entertaining. I was actually taken aback with how well done the...- Word Count: 73
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