Marvel Beyond Good and Ego (MCU/Marvel, Time Travel)
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Simonbob
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"Were you always a pretentious asshole, or did you train hard to get here?"
I think you doubled two chapters, 4 and 5.
This is a little over the top. Although, I did like the concept of young Tony Stark getting stuck in weird stuff, and having to deal with it. I think the power levels are throwing me off. It doesn't always fit.
The ideas are interesting, but I think you're reaching too far, too fast. It can be hard to keep up the connection, with those we got to know elsewhere. I also think you're over doing the psychadelic imagery. It, also, throws me off, after a while.
(Although, Antony Stark on an Total Shadow War against those who killed his son, with every scrap of money and infuence going into tracking them down, culminating in finding the people behind the sentinals, and personally killing each and every one of them, including high ranking political figures..... That could be cool.)
Simonbob
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Ok.
I've now slept on it, I think I can be a little more detailed.
First, I quite like it, over all. I'm a bit of a sucker for interesting comic fics.
Second, I read the whole thing in one go, and I'm not sure I could have kept it all straight in my head if I hadn't. Multiple POV, offscreen details having a major effect on the story going forward (Leading to the reader needing to work out what's going on), a lot of backstory being drawn in (Making things a LOT more complex- Hey, I'm an old comic fan, but I haven't even begun to keep up with all that stuff!), it's very deep. Sometimes, too deep. I'm keeping up, but as I said, old comic fan. That helps, but there's still quite a bit to keep in mind.
Third, I think this is, or should be, at least 3 different fics, that link into a mutual sequel. Each of the different "groups" are interesting, the paths they're taking on their own make pretty good stories.
Forth, not as much of an issue, I can only deal with so much psychadelic imagery. Some can deal with more, enjoy it, etc. Me? I ended up skipping about 2/3ds. That one, I think is more subjective, though.
Over all, I like it, but it takes actual effort to keep up. I'll enjoy any more that you post.
I've now slept on it, I think I can be a little more detailed.
First, I quite like it, over all. I'm a bit of a sucker for interesting comic fics.
Second, I read the whole thing in one go, and I'm not sure I could have kept it all straight in my head if I hadn't. Multiple POV, offscreen details having a major effect on the story going forward (Leading to the reader needing to work out what's going on), a lot of backstory being drawn in (Making things a LOT more complex- Hey, I'm an old comic fan, but I haven't even begun to keep up with all that stuff!), it's very deep. Sometimes, too deep. I'm keeping up, but as I said, old comic fan. That helps, but there's still quite a bit to keep in mind.
Third, I think this is, or should be, at least 3 different fics, that link into a mutual sequel. Each of the different "groups" are interesting, the paths they're taking on their own make pretty good stories.
Forth, not as much of an issue, I can only deal with so much psychadelic imagery. Some can deal with more, enjoy it, etc. Me? I ended up skipping about 2/3ds. That one, I think is more subjective, though.
Over all, I like it, but it takes actual effort to keep up. I'll enjoy any more that you post.