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I am a tad distracted by... Ahem... Another scifi franchise at the moment but I'm still working on this when I have inspiration. The hardest part is just how Luke and Padme's first conversation goes.

Well, you'll be glad to know my plan is to allow her to be "on screen" between Empire Strikes Back and Return of the Jedi but keep everything else intact... While also keeping her from dying.

No I mean what do you think of the rest of the story so far?

Wish I could, heh. What are your thoughts on the rest of it so far?

I'll think on it. It might help to point out the moments where the voices blended together the most.

Oh no, I posted it for critiques to improve it! And you're right: Upon further reflection, I do need to better differentiate Luke, Ahsoka and Leia's voices. Any suggestions beyond just cutting out the trailing off thing?

- - - They gathered around a desk in the small, aged chamber. Jar-Jar set down a holoprojector, and it flickered to life. The form of the woman from the initial recording slowly appeared, this time from a different angle. She was meeting with a Naboo Security Guard, an young man with dark skin...

- - - Luke was far from the backwater farmboy he'd been when two strange droids had dropped into his lap on Tatooine, but even he couldn't help his awe as he got his first look at Theed on Naboo. The sheer amount of running water, the green across the world, the architecture that flowed like it...

- - - Darth Vader brooded on the distant stars beyond the viewports of the Executor's bridge. The Super Star Destroyer was at Kuat, undergoing a long delayed refit and refurbishment. The work was long and tedious, but was being performed efficiently. He had ensured it, by limiting his...

Well, some of the good parts of the Disney canon will be included... - - - To say Leia was unhappy about this idea was inaccurate. "Are you kidding?!" "Livid" was much more accurate. Luke couldn't help wincing at the fury in Leia's voice and in her Force presence as she glared at him. Her...

Fair enough. I do want to finish this story at some point, because I intend for it to be able to fit into the pre-Disney Star Wars canon flawlessly.

That would be great! I do have a list of scenes if you need plot bunnies to work off of.

- - - It had been two weeks since they began training, and Luke was amazed at how far he'd come. Right now, he was fighting evenly with Ahsoka, who was hopping and spinning around in the air like a furious jubba bird. He stuck with Djem Sho, weathering the blows and letting the Force guide his...

Added. Interface is a bit different from what I'm used to I'm afraid.

And even more. - - - Ahsoka and Luke met in the cargo bay on Home One after Luke got acquainted with his new mechanic. Artoo was already waiting for them, silent. Ahsoka sat down with her legs crossed, and gestured to Luke to sit across from her. He did so, holding his spine straight. Ahsoka...

More. - - - The Medical Droid was a bit unhappy over having to treat Luke again so soon. Which was like saying Tattooine was somewhat dry and sandy. "This reckless disregard for medical treatment and advice is most distressing," the droid said, plunging a needle into Luke's shoulder with more...

Have to split my posts up, I'm afraid. - - - Ahsoka lifted her blade up high over her head, and she was on him in an instant. Her blows fell on him like a rain of blaster fire. Every attempt at an attack she stopped cold or deflected, and immediately returned in a ferocious counterattack. It...

Part the next. - - - They took a shuttle over to Home One, and Luke followed Ahsoka through the corridors. They passed the outer levels and reached the central sections after taking a rather long route. Finally, they reached the cargo bays. Ahsoka stopped at one hatch, and entered a code in...

- - - Ahsoka glared, her calm slipping. "What makes you think you actually sensed it? You barely know how to handle a lightsaber! I knew him for years! And I couldn't reach him!" "I sensed it! I know I did!" Luke insisted. Ahsoka again took deep breaths, centering herself. Luke let her do so...

Next part. - - - For a time there was no sound in the air save the recycling system and the heartbeat monitor. Luke opened his mouth, trying to think of something to say. All he could do was gape in shock at her. She let him get his thoughts together, silent and patient. Luke took a few deep...