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I do not know. It seems you have done an execellent job mashing these 2 stories together along with Leon. Every rewrite tends to make a story better, its just if you want to work on this story more or you feel you would rather do something else. Thanks for writing Drake! Guess im gonna have...

I mean i just read it as her walking out into the open. Leon had opened his cockpit to look at the body, and when he looked at her she mind blasted him or whatever she did. They are most likely 20 to 30 feet away at least.

Ok, was gonna skip this but then i saw who wrote it. Title does little to draw attention to what this fic is, just saying what series its a fanfic of should be good maybe? I like your new chapters, kinda weird to read as im used to reading Maria Campbell of the astral clocktower (the other fic...

Thanks for the reply Bear, ya I recognized both Cass and Steph from reading other stories, just didnt remember them exactly. Knew they where related but not exactly why. Still i like these kind of stories, i prefer a 1st person view, but these are well written, so will follow along and see...

Mmm well writing looks good, It did seem a bit like the 2 new characters where too good at what they did compared to batman, but again that could be easily shown just to be the joker getting the jump on him and Batman not being at his best, depends how further chapters go. The names of your 2...

Its more like the way he worded his sentances is poorly done. I get what he is saying in the story but its rough to read. English not being his primary language makes a lot of sense here. English has weird sentence structure compaired to a large number of other languages.

Wow ok, you have already posted a bit. Maybe consider a beta reader or something? Your second sentence in the story has poor grammar and makes it hard to get through, but i will definately be coming back to this story to read it completely. I only got about half way through the first post...

Thats true i had the same thought Kujo, but....we actually dont know for sure that there are no sailor scouts for the feddies or commonwealth. Im not to familar with sailor moon but i mean theres one scout for every planet...so we still have a couple that we dont know where they are.

maybe the Capellans?

Well something new to read now, thanks for for the update. I had only gotten through the first post, but it was really jarring not knowing who was on which side really or what had caused the fight, or for that matter where the fighting was. Will let you know what i think after going through...

So this is interesting and well writen, but it feels like we are starting in the middle of the story. Is there a link to a first part?

Well my first problem would be i barely remember the details of many of the pirate characters. Being a pirate though is not a lifestyle that encourages a long lifespan. The problem is changing to a mercenary or trying to go legit invites the other pirates to kill you or mutiny. You need to...