Star Wars The Sequel Trilogy - Done Right (Some Legends Elements, OCs)

Episode VII Crawl

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A long time ago in a galaxy far, far, away…

STAR WARS
EPISODE VII
THE FORCE AWAKENS

It is a perilous time in the galaxy. The sinister FIRST ORDER has risen from the ashes of the Empire, and struck a blow against the NEW JEDI ORDER, leaving only a handful of the guardians of justice remaining.

With the support of the NEW REPUBLIC, Leia Organa Solo leads a brave RESISTANCE. She is desperate to buy Luke Skywalker time to locate a legendary Jedi who survived the rise of the Empire to help restore peace and justice to the galaxy, and to locate her missing son, Ben.

Leia has sent her most daring pilot on a secret mission to Jakku, where an old ally has discovered a clue to Luke's whereabouts....
 
Chapter One

clancyphile

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The Star Destroyer closed in on the planet Jakku, where three decades ago, a major battle had been fought between the Empire and the Rebel Alliance.

It had been a gambit by the Empire to recover after Endor, and it had gone badly for them. Endor had seen the Emperor die, the second Death Star destroyed, and six Star Destroyers, including the Executor, destroyed.

At Jakku, the forces of the New Republic had destroyed two dozen of those vessels. The planet had seen a number of ships – both Republic and Imperial – crash. The result had been to wreck the ecosystem – many toxic materials had seeped in, and while it wasn’t as bad as it had been in the immediate aftermath, thanks to the Republic trying to clean up a mess not entirely of its making, it was a hard life for those who were trying to eke out a living.

On the flag bridge of the vessel stood one figure, his head covered in a helmet representative of the krayt dragons seen on Tatooine. He paused, concentrating for a moment. He stopped and smiled.

They not only had a chance to get the map, they had the chance to eliminate a Jedi.

“General Hux, deploy four squads to the village the Republic fighter landed at, and send two squads to the following coordinates,” Krayt said, rattling off two sets of numbers.

“As you command, Lord Krayt,” a voice said over the intercom.

~

“This will begin to make things right. I've traveled too far, and seen too much, to ignore the despair in the galaxy. Without the Jedi Order, there can be no balance in the Force,” Lor San Tekka said.

“We have Jedi,” a younger man said.

“But so much knowledge has been lost, Captain Dameron,” Lor San Tekka explained.

“Well, because of you now we have a chance. The General's been after this for a long time,” Captain Poe Dameron of the Resistance said.

“The General. To me, she's royalty,” the old explorer said.

“Well, she certainly is that,” Poe said. “Any sign of…”

“No, I have not been able to find Ben,” Lor San Tekka said, sadness crossing his face. “But this…”

Poe Dameron shook his head.

“Old man, the galaxy could fall to the First Order and she would still think that it was more important to find Ben,” Poe said. “Hell, Han Solo had the Millennium Falcon stolen, and he’s instead trying to find that kid.”

Before Lor San Tekka could reply, an orange BB unit burst in, unleasing a flurry of beeps.

Poe Dameron looked at Lor San Tekka.

“We’ve got company.”

~

About 200 miles from Niima Outpost, a G-Type Nubian 139 known as the Good Word sat. The ship’s owner had just given up trying to fix his fried hyperdrive when he suddenly looked to the sky.

“Stang,” he muttered. He dropped the tools, and instead went to gather supplies. Time was going to be very, very short.

He grabbed a satchel – his “go bag” – and slung it over his shoulder. Next was a small rucksack. He made his way to a closet, and grabbed some additional power cells for his blaster, and some explosives.

He was down the ramp in three minutes. It took two more to open the outer compartment that carried a 614-AvA speeder bike. It took him one more minute to start the bike, and make his escape.

Ben Solo was on the run, he had no ship, and he was stuck on a planet that made Tatooine look civilized. Now, he had to make it 200 miles to Niima Outpost on foot - just to have a chance to get off this rock.
 
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Krayt?

What elements from the EU are you taking?

Personally I don't think canon/legends mixes work too well.
 

clancyphile

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Pretty much the following:
Elements of the X-Wing series
Large Portions of The Thrawn Trilogy
Large Portions of Dark Empire/Dark Empire II/Empire's End
Elements of Jedi Academy
Elements of Timothy Zahn's Hand of Thrawn Duology
A few characters from NJO
A few characters from the Cade Skywalker comic saga

This means Star Wars Rebels is apocryphal.
The Mandalorian season one pretty much happened.
 
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So everything post DE is basically name mining? Without any of the context around it?

Legacy characters for example lived a century after the time of the ST coincidentally
 

clancyphile

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So everything post DE is basically name mining? Without any of the context around it?

Legacy characters for example lived a century after the time of the ST coincidentally

Somewhat... Darth Krayt was being held captive by the Vong in the NJO era, and was a Dark Jedi/Sith by then.
 
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No Vong at all in this one.

NJO was where the EU began going off the rails, IMO.
Okay, that's not an opinion I share.

But you do realize the personalities, character arcs, and the like of the characters your using were forged in the NJO? Or are you using the YJK era characters? I don't think using their names without anything else about them is particularly good writing.

Dislike the Vong, but they play an important role in the EU. In Jacen's story, Jaina's story, Luke's story, Raynar, Tahiri and many many others.

You also have Krayt, but without him in Vong or having escaped Vong captivity. So...why call him Krayt? Call him A'Sharad Hett or better yet make an OC. You have him as some FO officer, which Hux or really an OC can fit.

Ignoring the NJO means you aren't taking into account most of the picture of the EU. And ignoring their transformative impact on the characters. But I'm just giving fair criticism.
 

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Jacen was pretty meh character at the best.of times and then just got intolerable as Darth Larper and the Vong just made the whole setting too much like war hammer.

So if this dude wants to discount all if that in his sequel trilogy that's fine.

Lord knows I would.
 
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Jacen was pretty meh character at the best.of times and then just got intolerable as Darth Larper and the Vong just made the whole setting too much like war hammer.

So if this dude wants to discount all if that in his sequel trilogy that's fine.

Lord knows I would.
Dude, your speaking to probably the most passionate Jacen fan on the internet.

And one of the fiercest defenders of the Vong on the internet.
 
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Yeah you aren't gonna train wreck this dudes thread to defend your pet characters and use me an excuse to do it.
I gave my criticism, which he is free to ignore. I'm not trying to "wreck" the thread. I have absolutely no earthly clue why you are trying to provoke a fight here. Its his fic, not mine.

If he wants to mine EU names and planets without acknowledging anything about them, that's fine. Its lazy writing but that's his prerogative.
 
Chapter Two

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The village militia was all of 22 beings with older or makeshift blasters. Against eighty stormtroopers, they really had no chance.

Still, they fought. The stormtroopers were out in the open, and a fierce, but brief firefight raged. Soon, most of the militia was dead or wounded. Poe Dameron and BB-8 made their way to his X-wing, and Poe began to try to cycle the engines, cursing that he’d not left it primed for an immediate launch.

You thought leaving some systems warm would be a beacon for the First Order, he told himself. Probably a mistake – BB-8 gave enough warning for a clean getaway if we’d been warm. If he got out of this, he’d pass that on for the various pilots that were sent on these missions in the future.

He then felt some hits on his fighter and saw the engines power down. Stang.

He got out of the fighter, now useless, as BB-8 made his way over.

“You take this. It's safer with you than it is with me. You get as far away from here as you can. Do you hear me?” he asked the droid as he passed over what Lor San Tekka had given him.

BB-8 beeped his hesitation.

“I’ll come back for you,” Poe said. “It’ll be all right.”

BB-8 began to make his way over as Poe grabbed his blaster rifle. Jakku had always been a backwater, and the Empire had long restricted blasters. They’d said it was for public safety, but it Poe knew that the effective disarmament of the civilian population had made it far easier for the Empire to build a dictatorship.

Certainly, if these villagers had better weapons, maybe the First Order would have left them alone, he thought as he went to fight the stormtroopers. Maybe he’d buy it, but he’d take a few of those bastards down.

~

Night was cold in the desert, Ben realized. Well, he’d not had as much time as he wanted. But he’d always packed a “go bag” with rations. Using a heat source might not be a good idea, but he did have a trio of compact thermal blankets – New Republic surplus – designed for snow, desert, or woodland.

The First Order had wanted him – ever since he’d walked away from the Jedi Order. The dreams had been the worst. This Snoke – whoever he was – was trying to get him to turn to the Dark Side.

Ben Solo may not have felt the Jedi hadn’t lived up to their ideals, but the First Order made the Jedi seem reasonable. At least Uncle Luke and Aunt Leia had rational reasons for what they had done. He could see the logic behind it to an extent. He just had a profound disagreement with it.

He quickly set up his small shelter, and then used the desert thermal blanket to blend it in most of the way. With the way the wind was blowing, he should be out of the way until the First Order quit looking. In any case, he had ten days’ worth of food, and Nimma Outpost would be two and a half days away, counting the time he planned to hole up.

So, now, all he had to do was wait. That would be the second hardest part.

~

The battle was over.

A shuttle came down, and the commander made his way down. He marched to where the surviving villagers and went right to Lor San Tekka.

“Look how old you’ve become,” he said.

“Something worse has happened to you,” the old explorer said.

“You know what I have come for,” the figure in the krayt dragon-inspired helmet said.

“I know where you come from. Before you called yourself Krayt Ren,” Lor San Tekka said.

“The map to Skywalker. We know you've found it, and now you're going to give it to the First Order.”

“The First Order arose from the Sith. You did not.”

“I’ll show you the dark side,” Krayt Ren said.

“You may try, but you cannot deny the truth about –”

Krayt Ren ignited his lightsaber and slashed, killing the old explorer.

Poe Dameron, enraged at the murder, yelled, and began firing…

Krayt Ren stopped the bolt by holding up his hand.

“We will discuss about what the old man gave you on my ship. Captain Phasma, make an example of these villagers,” Krayt Ren ordered.

Two stormtroopers hauled Poe Dameron onto the shuttles as most of the stormtroopers began to open fire. One, FN-2187, didn’t fire, though. An act only one being noticed.
 
Chapter Three

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Ben Solo made good distance – about 18 miles – in the first night, and had gone to ground. His shelter not only kept him cool during the hot daytime hours, it had thermo-optic camouflage capabilities.

The second night saw him make his way another 15 miles, where he’d seen a collapsed AT-AT. That could make for a decent shelter – and maybe there would be some other supplies he could use – a different speeder bike or something.

The wreck would be a good place to shelter… then he saw the scavenger heading towards it. A BB unit was trailing it.

Okay, he thought, time to make myself scarce, he thought.

Only the BB unit had other ideas. It was tearing towards him, beeping with a mix of excitement.

The scavenger was right behind the droid.

“Hold on!” she said.

Ben stopped. Maybe he could talk his way out of this.

“Not trying to cause any trouble,” he said.

“You’re out in the middle of the desert and far from Niimo Outpost. This droid, by the way is saying your mother is worried sick about you and there is a huge reward for your safe return,” the scavenger said.

“Oh, great,” he said. Then he looked at the scavenger. “My mom and I haven’t really talked in a few years.”

“Why not?” The scavenger asked.

“Long, complicated story,” Ben said. “Look, I was trying to get to Niimo Outpost. I’ve got a bunch of survival rations and some gear I can exchange for a ride in there tomorrow.”

The scavenger thought the offer over. The droid beeped a bit more.

“What?” the scavenger asked, then looked at him.

“You’re Ben Solo? Any relation to Han Solo, the smuggler?” she asked.

“His son,” Ben said. “You don’t need to guess who my mom is, either.”

The scavenger decided to not press the issue further.

~

After the ride into Niimo Outpost, Ben was caught up in his thoughts.

You know, maybe you shouldn’t have blown off Kolman Tye’s offer for a complete overhaul, he told himself, he’d have gotten you brand-new parts, they’d have worked.

But then, how would you have explained a practically-new ship when you’re struggling to find any sort of decent smuggling run to make?

I wouldn’t be stuck here with few prospects, he told himself. Kolman Tye’s also been very good at keeping a low profile, even if the Silent Partner and Tye Score are wanted vessels, and he is a wanted man.

You do have prospects. You didn’t want to pursue them then, his inner debate partner – for lack of a better term – reminded him. You have potential to be more than this.

Maybe I’m my father’s son, he responded.

He blew out a sigh. Well, he needed a hyperdrive motivator, not to mention a new shunt, and there was a good chance his navicomputer had been fried as well. Maybe he could have done better than a G-type Nubian 139. Kolman had some other ships he’d have traded in for that.

Well, Niima Outpost wasn’t the worst spot to not have a working hyperdrive, but it had to be in the top 25.

The scavenger had turned down a huge offer for the droid, but Ben knew that Unkar Plutt wasn’t going to give up easily. This droid was marked, and the scavenger had no idea what she was in for. He made his way to one person, seeing if he could work out some passage, when he saw two thugs accosting the scavenger.

“Plutt wants droid. We take droid,” he heard.

He acted on instinct – his right hand dropped down to his blaster, and he drew it, aiming and firing a shot that disarmed one.

The two thugs turned to look at him.

“The lady obviously didn’t want to sell the droid,” he said. He kept his blaster ready to move again, but he knew they’d back down. They could push around someone unarmed, old, and trying to struggle, but when faced with the very real threat of someone who could stand up for themselves, they’d run. Which they did.

Now, maybe he could…

She was running after that droid, who was shocking a guy in the leg. Just like R2 did when he was mad, Ben remembered.

“What’s your hurry, thief?” he heard the girl ask.

He heard the denials, and watched as the impromptu interrogation continued, before he stepped in.

“Give the guy a chance,” he said.

“Who are you?” the girl asked.

Just then, their prisoner pointed, saying, “Trouble.”

They looked.

“Stormtroopers,” Rey breathed.

That began a chase, as the stormtroopers fired at them. Ben sent four shots back their way, hardly aiming, but saw one connect.

He turned.

“We’ll need a ship!” he called out.

“We can outrun them in that quadjumper!” the girl shouted.

“What about that one?” the other guy asked.

“It’s garbage! It hasn’t flown in years,” the girl responded. Ben took a look at what the guy had pointed to… then heard the explosion as the quadjumper go up after a strafing pass from TIE fighters.

“The garbage’ll do,” the girl said. Ben was already running there. A YT freighter… he noticed. Familiar memories flooded back of his dad… no, not now, he thought.

“Gunner position is over there,” the girl said.

“There’s two,” Ben responded as he raced to the cockpit. He began to warm up the ship. The more it began to warm up…

The freighter took off, and Ben managed to get it flying expertly. Then again, it was starting to feel more familiar.

Ship that looks like garbage, but flies like a dream? Yeah, I know you… Ben smiled. Okay, they’d need shields… over on the other side of the cockpit.

He reached out and flipped the switches, using the Force. Now, it was time to fly like crazy. He’d need to stay low, to confuse the sensors.

It didn’t take long for the other two people on board to send both TIE fighters into the sea of wrecks on Jakku. Ben then flew the ship out, making a clean getaway with a jump into hyperspace.

The girl and the guy both came from their gunner positions, and Ben left the cockpit.

“That was some flying!” the girl told him.

“It was good shooting, both of you,” Ben said.

“Thanks!” they said.

“How’d you learn to fly like that?” the girl asked.

“My dad taught me,” Ben said. “Anyway, who are you? I figure some proper introductions are in order, since we just killed First Order personnel and stole a starship. I’d like to get a sense as to who my fellow fugitives are.”

“I’m Rey,” the scavenger said.

“Finn,” the man said. Ben could sense Finn was hiding something.

“For garbage, this ship flew pretty well,” Rey said.

“She may not look like much, but she’s always had it where it counts,” Ben said.

“You know this ship?” Rey asked.

Ben walked over, and opened a hidden compartment. He smiled, showing familiarity with the ship, but he had a bad feeling.

“Yeah, it was my dad’s,” he said.
 

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